Writing

Good, Yazz! Make a list of the corrections and explain why the changes were made.

Martin Luther King "I have a Dream"

======================================= "Dreams" by Langston Hughes

Good, Yazz. I have edited it, and I'll post it on the main wiki.Check the revision to see the punctuation changes.

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Good, Yazz. There were just 2 extra words in the sentences that needed to be omitted.


 * However, when a parrot named Alex talks and seems to understand what he is saying.
 * These few examples show something that even animals with small brains are smart and have feelings.

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FINDING APPROPRIATE WORDS WHEN WRITING 1) In your //Oxford Collocations Dictionary// find the part indicated and write a sentence for each phrase. a) **aim** PREPOSITION **(try/plan to achieve something)** b) VERB + **goal (to start one)** c) ADJECTIVE + **success** d) **idea** + VERB e) QUANTIFIER + **depression**

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Examples:- A) I ' m aimimg for a career as being a successful pilot in my future. B) Its important to establish many goals in our lifes. C) The phenomenal game i've played res u lted in such a spectacular success. D) I've came up with an unmistakeble idea s to reach my goals. E) A period of serious depression can a ffect our mental and physical behaviour.

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Paraphrase

Most of the time students misuse the quotation in their __research paper or essays or their small paragraphs__ cause the were using it wrongly in taking notes. __Bottom line they__ should focus and give more attention in the use of quotations in their papers and when taking notes as well

Most of the time students misuse quotations in their __research paper,essays or small paragraphs__ because they were using them wrongly in taking notes. __The bottom line is that__ they should focus on and give more attention to the use of quotations not only in their papers but when taking notes as well.

This is good because you have very successfully put it in your own words. However, you are missing one of the main ideas. It isn't really that they use quotations in the wrong way (misuse). While that is true, it is very general. To be more specific, they overuse them, which means that they use too many of them. They should restrict their use of quotations when they take notes so that they are not tempted to use a lot of them in their papers. I have copied your paraphrase in an edited form. and here are a few tips:

1) When listing a series of things (1st underline), use the conjunction(and,or, but) only once. 2) Remember that you need to write differently than you speak (e.g., bottom lline)